雅思大作文范文解析：如果要你改变家乡的一件事，你会改变什么

## 题目 If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. 题型：综合提问 翻译：如果要你改变家乡的一件事，你会改变什么？给出理由和具体例子。 ## 写作结构 开头段：个人观点 + 背景介绍 主体段 1：想增强社区意识的原因 1 + 论证 主体段 2：想增强社区意识的原因 2 + 论证 主体段 3：想增强社区意识的原因 3 + 论证 结尾段：重申观点 ## 范文解析 ### 开头段 交代背景“人们互相不联系、互相不照顾、不熟悉自己的邻居”。 背景句：People don’t feel connected, they don’t look out for each other, and they don’t get to know their neighbors. 个人观点：If I could change one thing about my hometown, I think it would be the fact that there’s no sense of community here. ### 主体段 1 想增强社区意识的原因之一，人们往往都不稳定居住在同一个社区。 主题句：People come and go a lot here. 举例论证：They change jobs frequently and move on. This means that they don’t put down roots in the community. They don’t join community organizations and they’re not willing to get involved in trying to improve the quality of life. If someone has a petition to put in a new street light, she has a very hard time getting a lot of people to sign. They don’t feel it has anything to do with them. They don’t get involved in improving the schools because they don’t think the quality of education is important to their lives. They don’t see the connection between themselves and the rest of their community. ### 主体段 2 另一个导致社区意识不强的原因是人们从不关注身边的人。 主题句：People don’t try to support others around them. They don’t keep a friendly eye on their children, or check in on older folks if they don’t see them for a few days. They’re not aware when people around them may be going through a hard time. 举例论证：For example, they may not know if a neighbor loses a loved one. There’s not a lot of community support for individuals. ### 主体段 3 导致社区意识不强的第三个原因是邻里之间互相不认识，不熟悉。 主题句：Neighbors don’t get to know each other. Again, this is because people come and go within a few years. 举例论证：So when neighbors go on vacation, no one is keeping an eye on their house. No one is making sure nothing suspicious is going on there, like lights in the middle of the night. When neighbors’ children are cutting across someone’s lawn on their bikes, there’s no friendly way of casually mentioning the problem. People immediately act as if it’s a major property disagreement. ### 结尾段 重申观点：我的家乡是一个适宜居住的好地方，社区意识强一些会更好。 My hometown is a nice place to live in many ways, but it would be much nice if we had that sense of community. ## 重点表达 sense of community 社区意识 look out for 留心；注意；关照 move on 离开；继续前进；对......采取行动 put down roots in 定居 keep an eye on 关注